The most basic and common question in MBA Interviews is: Introduce yourself.
With this question, the following thoughts should come to your mind.
How does one introduce himself or herself?
What are the key criteria for this introduction?
What are the steps to preparing an awesome introduction?
How should you practice your introduction?
Let’s look at these questions one at a time.
Why should you prepare an introduction?
In majority of the interviews, the interviewer will begin with a question like:
- Introduce yourself.
- Tell me something about yourself.
- Who is ‘your name’?
The above are examples of all the same question: your introduction.
In short, your introduction is the key to setting up your interview and making sure you lead the interview in the direction you wish it to go.
By crafting the right introduction and letting the interviewer know about the most significant aspects of your personality, you can make sure you introduce enough talking points for the interview.
What should be included in your introduction?
Your introduction you include the following:
- Your basic details (Name and current occupation/status as a student, your family background if you want).
- Your major objective and learning-related goal in life.
- Your major strengths and qualities that define you as a person.
- Your major achievements, which add weight to your personality.
What should not be included in your introduction?
This is even more important that the above. Make sure you avoid the following:
- Unnecessary details about your city.
- Unnecessary details about schooling and graduation (marks, names of schools, etc.).
- Do not talk in detail about your family (parents and siblings). This is your introduction, not your family introduction.
- Your introduction is not your resume; avoid trivial details and achievements.
- Avoid childish hobbies like surfing the internet and trivial skills like being able to work with Microsoft word and excel. This is the expected of you.
What are the steps to prepare an ideal introduction?
Step-1: Introspection
The first step is to introspect and make sure you know yourself. The key is to have absolute clarity about yourself. Only when you have this clarity can you represent yourself with clarity. The key things you should clearly know about yourself:
- Your career objective
- Your strengths
- Examples to back up your strengths
Once you have this information, you can weave an introduction around these elements. The last element (examples to back up your strengths) will not be a part of the introduction; it is just to make sure you can back up everything you share in the interview.
Step-2: Converting your basic details into something impressive
We often the make the mistake of underselling ourselves and do not present ourselves in the best way to possible. For example, let’s look at the following introductions:
Introduction-1:
Good Morning Sir. I am Prashant Chadha, a resident of Chandigarh, the city beautiful. I am a Civil Engineer from Punjab Engineering College, and I passed out in 2007. My father is a businessman, and my mother is a housewife. My elder sister is an MBA too, and my younger sister is a post-graduate in commerce. I have been working as a Verbal Ability trainer for the last nine years, and I run the website, wordpandit.com.
Introduction-2:
Good Morning Sir. I am Prashant, a graduate engineer and founder of an Ed-tech start-up, Wordpandit.com. Having being born and brought up in a business family, I had an early introduction to the world of business and entrepreneurship. With my keen interest in academics, technology and having a strong urge to make a difference to the lives of others, I have forged a career in training and online education.
In the two introductions given above, I am talking about the same person (Yes, this is my introduction). You should be able to spot the marked difference between the two introductions. Let’s dissect and identify some key learnings from the above:
- Talk in terms of skills and strengths.
- Facts make the introduction boring and dreary.
- Describe your qualities rather than what you have done; this creates an element of intrigue.
- A positive view of oneself ensures that you can describe yourself a lot better.
- Talk about yourself and yourself alone; not your family (even though they are important to you).
Step-3: Convert every piece of factual information into something qualitative
It is critical that you talk in terms of qualities while you introduce yourself. You might be a little confused here. Let me take some examples and help you understand this process.
Let’s talk about family background first. I am just quoting different family backgrounds and how can you relate them to some qualities:
- Army background: experienced diversity and varied cultures; a sense of integrity and dedication to your job.
- Business family: early exposure to trade and business; created interest in entrepreneurship.
- Parents working with government: the importance of doing your job well and how systems/processes work; how to deal with people from different walks of life and how to excel in any situation.
You can see from the above that each situation has been converted into a generalisation and instead of simple facts, you can quote such statements in your introduction.
Step-4: Work some magic with your strengths
The next important step is to make sure you are clear with your strengths. In your introduction, you can always quote qualities in the following manner:
- Positive attitude: I am a positive person with a proactive approach towards solving problems.
- Innovative: I am a strong believer in creative thinking and using innovation to solve problems.
- Honesty: I strongly believe in maintaining my work ethic and like to make sure I complete my tasks with utmost sincerity.
You can see from the above that simple qualities have been converted into something impressive and these will surely leave a mark on the interviewer. One key thing here is that you should have relevant facts and examples to back up your strengths. Do not simple quote nice words and phrases; these need to be a part of your personality.
Step-5: Clarity with objectives
An important part of the introduction is to be clear with your career objectives. For example, my career objective is to have an impact on the education landscape and making a difference with respect to learning practices of students. This might seem far-fetched to you but it aligns perfectly with what I do. In the same vein, you need to discover what you wish to achieve (these might be skills for all you know) and then present them in the best possible manner.
One approach possible here is that you can weave your objective around the following MBA streams:
Finance: I have always been intrigued with the financial world and wish to achieve more in the field.
Sales and Marketing: I have always been excited by how the sales and marketing division of companies drive businesses. I strongly wish to learn the best practices in the field and understand psychological as well as managerial aspects related to this domain.
Operations: I wish to take my knowledge to the next level with respect to organisational tasks and operations. Operations form the backbone of businesses, and I believe that having the right toolset I believe I can grow in this field.
HR: Being a strong people person, I believe that HRs have a strong role to play in the development of the organisation. I wish to expand my horizons in this field.
In case you do not wish to take the above approach, you can then co-relate your career objectives with specific skills and industries. In case you have relevant work experience, you can tie your objectives to a relevant field as well.
Step-6: Ready the final draft
Once you are done with the above soul-searching and have prepared the rough draft in terms of qualities, you can work on the final draft. In terms of structure, you can adopt the following flow:
- Your basic details (quoted in the manner given above).
- A couple of strengths that define you as a person.
- Your career objective and how it relates to what you have done or are doing.
- Any special extra-curricular activity or hobby that reflects positively on your personality. You can also quote some quality or hobby of yours in a light manner and showcase a jovial side to your personality. The panel always appreciates a well-rounded personality.
To sum it up:
Well, this completes this exhaustive guide on how to build your perfect introduction. In short, keep the following in the mind:
- Avoid verbiage and unnecessary details.
- Focus on yourself and your qualities.
- Avoid plain and vanilla facts; use generalisations to define yourself.
- Most importantly: believe in yourself and who you are.
Your introduction is about you, and it is vital you believe in yourself.
Note: You can paste your introductions in the comments section, and I can quickly review them for you here.
Iam Jayshri a graduate engineer and currently working in Infosys as a systems Engineer . I have always aspired to achieve best results through hardwork and constant improcement .I aim at a career which gives me a scope of self expression in the form of interpretation and analysis along with my ability to take primed decisions making Analytics as a promising sector to outcast my skills
Hi, I am Rajvee Jain, a graduate in Account and Finance from Mumbai. My father is a businessman and mother a house maker. My elder sister is a graphic designer. I have always been intrigued with the financial world and this is the reason why I took up a job at Shapoorji Pallonji Finance Private Limited. This kept my interest intact and now I am ready to explore more about the field. When it comes to hobbies, I love playing sports like lawn tennis and badminton.
Hello sir I am Manish bansal.i am a mining engineering graduate from mbm engineering college Jodhpur.currently I am working in wonder cement Ltd.i belong to pink City jaipur i have been born and brought up in joint business family so I had an early exposure to trade and business.i am driven by constantly set goals for myself and strive for new experiences. In short term I am seeking diverse knowledge and skill set to boost my career.my goal in life is to improve education standards in India and make it more accessible. as a hobby I love reading,chess and traveling.
Thank you Sir for feedback on earlier introduction,I have reframed it please give your valuable feedback.Thanks in advance sir really appreciate your efforts.
I am Yash Mehta a graduate in civil engineering from Udaipur. I carry an experience of 17 months in developing my skills as a site engineer for a construction firm. I got a lot of field exposure while working and learned how to manage people & work with team.I believe in maintaining my work ethic.
While working I discovered my interest for management aspects of a company At that time I realized that to climb a corporate ladder managerial skills are must.I have always been intrigued with financial world & wish to achieve more in this field.I strongly wish to learn the best practises in the field & understand psychological as well as managerial aspects related to this domain.
Apart from my curriculum I like to do mystery audits and that’s why I am associated with various mystery audit firms since 2014 where I learnt a lot about different products and internal workings of different companies.. In my spare time I like to watch cricket and play chess .
Nirmal Kumar, An Aerospace Engineer form Amrita School of Engineering, Currently working as a Test Engineer at Infosys along with managing one of my fathers micro enterprise. I am a multi-faceted versatile person who always tries to expand his horizon. Right through my Engineering i managed to balance academics along with starting a venture called SOStudents. I owe my Entrepreneurial spirit to my family and the multitude of experience. My short term goal is to work for a consulting company since it offers inter-industry exposure and visibility of the problems faced by the companies at different stages and levels.
Good afternoon sir,
Myself Disha. I am an Economics Graduate from Maitreyi College,University Of Delhi. While studying economics, I developed a close understanding of economic fluctuations and other external changes affecting business,which fascinated me to explore practical intricacies of business. 10 years down the line, I see myself being a senior level manager.I consider myself a strong willed and adaptable person.
Myself is wrong
Instead say “I am ….”
Good Morning Everyone,
I am Sarwanjeet Singh, a native of Srinagar, Jammu & Kashmir.
I joined Bharat Petroleum Corporation Limited after completing my B.TECH in Mechanical Engineering from NIT Srinagar.
Currently, I am working as a Sales Officer, handling Retail Outlets in Surat District, Gujarat with a total annual turnover of 900 Crore rupees.
I have been a National Level Cricket player for my state representing in Vijay Merchant and Cooch Behar Trophy conducted by BCCI.
I was also recommended for Indian Military Academy, Dehradun.
Sports has taught me importance of hard work and team work in acheiving any goal.
Hey Sarwanjeet
This is a great collection of facts but does not portray your qualities as such. Try to re-phrase this and bring our your qualities.
Currently, even though the content is good factually, this does not really impress.
Read some of the other introductions on this page and take some clues from them.
Regards
Prashant
Hello, I’m Bhagyesh I have done my computer engineering from RAIT, Navi Mumbai.Throughout my engineering along with academics, I was actively involved in co-curricular activities.I was a part of student committee called as CSI-RAIT, wherein I was a member of sponsorship team then I became the Joint Event Organizer and in final year I was the Secretary of the committee.Also, I am recently associated with Amateur Astronomy Club where the objective is to spread awareness about astronomy in the society.I’m a person who believes in being honest and positive.When it comes to hobbies I like to play cricket, Fishkeeping and Stargazing.
Hey Bhagyesh
You have the content but not the presentation.
For example, this line: Throughout my engineering along with academics, I was actively involved in co-curricular activities.I was a part of student committee called as CSI-RAIT, wherein I was a member of sponsorship team then I became the Joint Event Organizer and in final year I was the Secretary of the committee.
Can be re-written as: I am a multi-faceted person and I like to push myself to the limit. Right through my engineering, I balanced academics well with a host of co-curricular and extra-curricular activities.
This is how you indirectly state things. Let them ask a follow-up question on what you have said. Then provide details.
Re-work your answer along these lines.
Regards
Prashant
I am Joyeeta Sarma, a graduate engineer in Electronics and Telecommunication from Guwahati. Grounded in values because of my upbringing in a joint family, I believe in being tolerant and adaptive in life. I spent last two years developing my skills as a software developer for Zaloni Technologies. I love managing and working with teams and believe in maintaining my work ethic.
Apart from my curriculum, I was engaged in NCC during my school days and got the opportunity to represent Nort Eastern Region in Annual Republic Day Camp. I am extremely passionate about singing and also pursued formal training in Indian classical music.
Hey Joyeeta
Overall, this is nice and effective (short and crisp as well). Just felt that somehow, the first two lines lacked impact here. Other than that, it seems pretty sorted. So just work on improving that part and rest all is fine.
Regards
Prashant
Hi Sir/Mam,
I am Shakabda, a BTech Grad in Electrical Engg. with couple of years of experience in IT industry as an Application Developer in Front End side. I was always drawn towards Financial World and its instruments because of my father, who being an Entrepreneur kind of nudged me into it. This made me curious about how a company and its subsidiaries function and the world of financials around it. I kick-started my journey by pursuing CFA Level – 1 and clearing it which was a revelation for me that this is something I would genuinely enjoy doing all my life. It was a glimpse into a bigger and fascinating world. In the longer run, I aim to b working in Fund or Asset Management sector. One of my biggest strength would be I am a very level headed person. I am never too happy or sad. I am mostly stoic which certainly makes me a Managerial Candidate in the near future. I usually make use of my spare time by watching loads of Podcasts, Series and Standups. They are my Knowledge Center at times.
Thank You.
Hey Shakabda
Overall, this is pretty decent. Just feel you can make this crisp, shorter and more effective. There is a feeling of rambling with this introduction (especially the first part; too many details). See, you have to tease them and give them a teaser; let them ask you about your knowledge of finance further in the interview.
Regards
Prashant
hi, I am Roshan,I am from bhandara which is also known as city of Ponds.I have done my schooling from there itself. i have done Btech in electrical engineering. currently i am in pune working with an ngo on part time basis also preparing for mba entrances.
talking about myself i am simple and ambitious person. I know what I want from my life and try to live each day with postivity. i believe a person should be honest to himself then only he will be able to achieve his dream
there are many things I like to do and experience. I am adventurous by nature, i like travel and explore new places also like to take up new challenges ,it gives me motivation to work toward excellence.
Hey Roshan
– Make the start better. Describe yourself better. Location or where you belong to is incidental. mention if asked. The first thing you say should mention what is special about you. How is Bhandara or city of ponds your quality or definition? Remember, this is about you. You should shine out of this.
– These are essentially facts and these don’t offer an insight into the kind of person you are, the experiences that have shaped you, what you have learnt and what you wish to learn. These are the things that you should clearly come out of your introduction. Need to do significant re-work on this.
– Read the other comments here and take some clues from there.
Regards
ty sir for your valuable feedback i have worked on it can you pls have look at my introduction one more time
Good morning sir, I am Roshan, a Btech graduate in electrical engineering. I am from Bhandara, the city of ponds. My mother is a homemaker and father is teacher. Being grownup seeing the commitment and sincerity needed in the teaching profession, the same has been reflected in me. I am simple, ambitious and optimistic person. I am very clear about my goal and I believe a person should be honest with himself then he will be able to achieve his goals.
During graduation I was associated with a network marketing firm where I lead a group of 100+ people so I can say that I have leadership skills. I want to learn hard and soft skill by doing mba so as to develop my managerial skills and grow up to be a successful entrepreneur.
Sir,I am Yash Mehta a civil engineer from Udaipur. I have a total experience of 17 months as site engineer.It was a great learning experience and I got a lot of field exposure and I also learned how to manage people.I worked closely with the director as well as labous.
I am also a mystery shop auditor from 2014 where I learnt a lot about different products and internal workings of different companies.
Hey Yash
These are essentially facts and these don’t offer an insight into the kind of person you are, the experiences that have shaped you, what you have learnt and what you wish to learn. These are the things that you should clearly come out of your introduction. Need to do significant re-work on this.
Read the other comments here and take some clues from there.
Regards
Hello Sir, My name is Priya Yadav.I belong from Haryana, the city of gods but born and bought up in Ghaziabad.I have been staying out of my house for past 7 and a half years which has made me an independent person. I have my father, an elder brother and an elder sister in my family. Due to the early demise of my mother, I have learned the art of being responsible at a very young age.
I have passed my graduation from DCE in chemical technology with first class.
Being from a business-oriented family, I am the first one doing a job from past 3 and a half years with an exposure in different domains like travel, telecom, finance.
Till now I have used intuition and experience to guide my but I feel the need to strengthen my skills by learning formal methodologies and benefit from personal experiences of faculty and batch mates and gain a wider perspective of and adopt the same to the extent possible in real life.
In my free time, i like writing. I love going to gym.I have the curiosity to learn new things like recently I have started learning Spanish.Sometime in future, I want to write a book on my life to share the learnings and experience.
Hi Priya
– Make the start better. Describe yourself better. Location or where you belong to is incidental. mention if asked. The first thing you say should mention what is special about you. How is Ghaziabad or Haryana your quality or definition?
– Your introduction; not your family introduction (Please read other comments as well. I seem to be repeating the same thing again and again)
– There is a general lack of coherence in this. This is random information thrown together. This does not do justice to you.
– For example, see this line: I have been staying out of my house for past 7 and a half years which has made me an independent person.
This can be phrased as: I am an independent individual who has learned to fend for herself and my professional core has been built by a varied and diverse work experience of 3 and half years.
This seems far better than what has been written above. Re-work along these lines.
Regards
Prashant
I am Nripen Barai, I have come from Gopalgonj district. I have completed my Professional BBA program from the National University of Bangladesh.
As per my accomplishment I have conducted a research on small business enterprise and recently I have completed my internship on general banking.
I am very ambitious and interested for my higher education and for that reason I want to get myself admitted into your selected university.
Hey Nripen
Writing in from Bangladesh? ..:)
Few things:
– This lacks impact
– Talk more about your qualities rahter than city or college details. These should be there on your CV.
– The introduction is your first point of impact: make sure you use it well.
Regards
Sir,thanks for your earlier review.keeping your suggestions in mind I have drafted this ans. Please give your review on this.
Good afternoon sir, I am Aditya Pratap Singh Dixit. I come from Bhopal, the city of lakes. I am pursuing B.E.in Electrical and electronics Engg. from UIT RGPV Bhopal.
Sir I have always been intrigued by the success stories of the businesses which began from scratch and turned into big companies and affected the lives of so many people like alibaba paytm google to name a few. This inspires and drives me towards pursuing MBA where I will be exposed to the detailed case studies of such businesses and will get to know how they became so big and what challenges they faced.
Sir my short term goal is to work with the organisations after MBA and learn the nuances of business and in the long term I wish to open a venture of my own and pursue my entrepreneurial pursuits.
Sir, I believe the oratory and the leadership skills that I possess and my ability to socialise and coordinate with people which will get even better with the MBA and also I will learn great many things during the course which will help me in achieving my goals. I like reading newspapers and also have written a few poems and I like singing to myself in my free time.
Hey Aditya
Few things:
– Make the start better. Describe yourself better. Location or where you belong to is incidental. mention if asked. The first thing you say should mention what is special about you. How is city of lakes or Bhopal your quality or definition?
– Overall, this intro displays a marked improvement over the previous one.
– Your next challenge is to make this crisper and cut out the extra words/stuff. Keep it minimal: short and sweet works best.
Regards
Thank you Sir for giving me this opportunity, I belong from Sirsa, a city in Haryana; did my schooling there and graduation from SRM University, Chennai. Currently I’m working as Quality Assurance Engineer in Cognizant overseeing team of 3 resources. My ability to use innovation for problem solving garnered appraisals, awards and promotions for my work. With exposure to team management and interpersonal skills in 2+ years of work experience, now I aspire knowledge in management thus pushing my career progression. Also, I’m a firm believer in giving back to society and thus involved across NGOs, and corporate social responsibility programs.
Hey Ankit
– Make the start better. Describe yourself better. Location or where you belong to is incidental. mention if asked.
-The first thing you say should mention what is special about you. Sirsa or haryana is not your quality.
– The middle portion is pretty good
– The end kind of peters out and lacks impact.
So, you need to work on this a little.
Regards
I am Kamal a native of Visakhapatnam,city of destiny. I am a graduate in electronics and communication engineering currently working at TCS. I primarily work for server migration,wherin my part is to ensure data migrated to new server without any loss and change in data. Aditionally as a part of fun commitee member iI had conducyed various activities at our project. My ability to multitask is actually something i devlopedduring my college days wherib i held several positions of importance like cordinator for student body organisation Centre for Creative Arts(C.C.A), Corpal leader for NCC unit of our batallion, cordinator for Bectagon-15 a national level cultural fest hosted by our college. I was also a part of an NGO,associated with it for four years and also served as blood coordinator for one year. Besides this i like to perform acts for the scripts written by me and i hod won several prizes at university level and at inter college compitetions.
Hey Kamal
– City of destiny? How is this relevant to you?
– Why give so many specific details about your work? Let them ask. Frame it more in terms of general job description. This undersells you currently.
– You have the facts to back up your multi-tasking claim. Can you portray this differently? Every second person has the same explanation. Explore how you can use the same facts to showcase a different quality.
– The last point is a good one but can be written better.
– Need to make this crisper as well.
Regards
Prashant
My name is Sakshi Pandey. Being an IT engineer, it has been an honour that I am working with ABC services
currently. I spent the last two years developing my skills of working in a team and providing client with project
deliverables on time. Having tried my hand in the technical field, now I think its time to learn and develop managerial
skills to climb up the corporate ladder. Being a helpful and cheerful person , I tend to make people around me happy which
in turn creates a positive environment and helps me function better. I also participated in many events in school and college level. Making small gift items,reading fiction and watching FRIENDS are my stress busters. From XYZ college, I expect a program which will help me to gain the business and management skills required to excel in the corporate world and also shape my life personally and professionally.
Hey Sakshi
Honestly speaking, this is really not that impressive.
You seem to be essentially saying the same thing that everyone else. And your thinking that it is time to climb up the corporate ladder is no valid reason for your being selected. Always talk in terms of learning and what you wish to learn and what you aspire for in life.
This needs significant re-working. Bring out your best qualites and read comments left on the some of the other intros here. Will help you a lot.
Regards
Prashant
Hi Sir
Please evaluate below introduction-
I consider myself as a technophile, a resident of Gandhinagar , My upbringing was in defense society because my father was in Air force, because of that I have experienced diversity and varied cultures also a sense of integrity and dedication towards your work., I have pursued my engineering in electronics and communication. During college I organized many technical and non-technical events. In sports, I was part of a team which won the college football League. Currently I am working in an IT Consultancy, My hard work and commitment paid off when I won several performance awards for client satisfaction. At that time I realized that to climb a corporate ladder managerial skills are must. Coming to my hobbies I love surfing the internet, being updated with latest technologies, travelling, football, making new friends, video games. This journey led me to become a quick learner, an enthusiastic person. Passing through different phases of life I developed some traits like quick learner, problem solver, flexible and goal oriented. I am positive person with a proactive approach towards solving problems.
Hey
Just separated the sentences for you:
– I consider myself as a technophile, a resident of Gandhinagar , My upbringing was in defense society because my father was in Air force, because of that I have experienced diversity and varied cultures also a sense of integrity and dedication towards your work.,
– I have pursued my engineering in electronics and communication.
– During college I organized many technical and non-technical events. In sports, I was part of a team which won the college football League.
– Currently I am working in an IT Consultancy, My hard work and commitment paid off when I won several performance awards for client satisfaction.
– At that time I realized that to climb a corporate ladder managerial skills are must.
Where is the connection in these?
You need to stich something which is connected and which moves in a manner where you seem to have perfect clarity with respect to who you are.
These are facts placed together but these are not gelling well with each other.
You need to re-work this and present yourself in a much better way.
Search for connections; say less but only things which are relevant and which reflect your best self.
Regards
Prashant
Hello sir. I m Sonu, a graduate in Account and Finance from Mumbai. Besides academics I was engaged with National Social Scheme (NSS). I also participated in sports and various events held at college level. I am a strong believer in creative thinking and using innovation to solve problems. I have always been intrigued with the financial world and wish to achieve more in this field. Cooking act as a best stress reliever for me. Besides cooking, I love spending time with my family as well as my pets.
Hey Sonu
You have the information plus you have kept it short and sweet. The logical ordering of these statements/information can be improved. The NSS and sports part can be placed towards the end. And the part about what you wish to do can be placed before it. Also, just try to add one more reason/experience which strengthens why should you opt for MBA.
Regards
Prashant
Good Morning everyone,
I am Prakhar Gangrade, a computer science graduate from Hansraj College, University of Delhi. I think one of the most distinct characteristic I possess is the diversity of experiences. I am a science driven student with a passion for arts. My appeal for business generated from observing a family-run manufacturing industry. The decline of the business has influenced me to study the dynamics of business management especially in the field of Marketing. I always had a creatively inclined personality and an urge to meet and know new people. When it comes to hobbies, I have a keen interest in reading about mythology, cooking and painting. My passion for arts helped me to lead the Fine Arts Society of college for two consecutive years. I constantly aim to push myself outside the comfort zone for which I took a managerial role in Project Aashayein which involved 3000+ underprivileged children.
Thanks Prashant.
Hey
Some points for you:
– I think one of the most distinct characteristic I possess is the diversity of experiences.: Simply say I possess diverse experiences. Why write such a complicated sentence?
– I am a science driven student with a passion for arts.: Does not make sense
– My appeal for business generated from observing a family-run manufacturing industry. The decline of the business has influenced me to study the dynamics of business management especially in the field of Marketing. : Instead of decline, use a word such a challenges.
Overall issues:
Information is not flowing in any order.
Can be structured better.
Start with a positive quality and what you presently do. Then explain your background and why are you suited for MBA. Then explain your experience (including the NGO work) and your positive qualities. Also, co-related everything where you ca.
Regards
Prashant
Good Morning everyone,
I am Prakhar Gangrade, a computer science graduate from Hansraj College, University of Delhi. Being brought up in a business family, I had an introduction to business and entrepreneurship at an early stage. I tend to be comfortable in leadership position and was elected as the Junior Captain in High School. Though I could not pursue business management at graduation, I always found myself inclined towards organizational jobs. Co-founding a social project ‘Project Aashayein’ gave a tremendous boost to this inclination of mine particularly in Marketing domain. Heading the Fine Arts Society for two consecutive years helped me push my comfort zone and refined the leadership skills. I was felicitated for the same. I wish to work in the Marketing Function of a leading business to learn the psychological and product fundamentals in a market. My hobbies include reading about Hindu mythology and painting. I am a person of strong social responsibility and always believes in contributing in some way.
Hi Prakhar
This is much improved. Still feel this can be made better by improving the presentation and making sure that the information flows in a more logical manner (you seem to skip from personal to school to graduation and so on). Just go in one sequence and make sure things are clearer. You have enough content in this.
Regards
Hello Sir,
I am Sushant Kumar, born and brought up in Patna. I did my graduation from NIT Jamshedpur. After completing my graduation, I joined TCS and started working with one of their major clients, Nationwide Building Society, a British mutual financial institution with its headquarters in Swindon UK and the largest building society in the world.I have had the fortune to work in India and represent TCS at Nationwide Headquarters as well. My efforts and dedications have always been lauded at the workplace and I won many PRIDE awards for the same. While working there, one of the most challenging and promising profiles that garnered all my attention was business analytics.
How multitude of market research data is being analyzed and major business decisions are being made based on that. This decision will drive the course of the organization is something that requires knowledge from technological as well as managerial domain. This led me to find my true calling for management. I strongly believe hard work, passion, and honesty towards your goal are the three pillars for a person to become successful in life. Other than my professional pursuits, I like traveling, listening music and watching TV series and movies.
Hey Sushant
Why quote this? ….with its headquarters in Swindon UK and the largest building society in the world…..? How is this your introduction?
You can weed out almost 20-25% of this introduction and make it a lot crisper/shorter/effective. That is what is required here. Love some of the parts (how you have connected your work and your reason for MBA) but overall, there is significant rambling in this introduction and those parts can be shortened/removed.
Regards
Prashant
HI…. I would like to thank you to give me an opportunity to introduce myself…Myself Rahul Kumar, Student of B.Sc. I came from Barh, one of the most beautiful and holy city of Bihar. My mother is a housewife and my father is a businessman. Having being born and brought up in a business family,
I have been interested in business. My education in a RSS school infused me with traits of discipline and integrity. I have curiosity of learning new things and always being self-dependent which always motivated me. I am a good learner and hard working so don’t give up easily. I am a helpful person with cheerful personality which helps me in forming peer groups easily. My short term goals include to acquire quality general academic education in business administration and my long term goal be successful senior manager in a multinational commodities corporation. I believe that on my way to achieve my goal I will express my talents and interests and contribute to society’s prosperity
Apart from this, I am a tutor of high school students. As per hobby and interest I love cooking
Thank you
Hey Rahul
A few things (I have noted this in quite a few introductions posted on this page):
– This is your introduction; not the introduction of your family.
– The phrasing needs to be crisper here. This is too formal and does not flow naturally.
– You don’t need to say As per hobby…You can simply say I love cooking as it relaxes me or something like that.
– Also, try to make connections between everything. This seems like a collection of sentences (you have the content, need to connect better).
Regards
Prashant
Sir I know it’s a bit too long but I would be really grateful if you will take time out to read and give your priceless review.
Good afternoon sir. I am Aditya Pratap Singh Dixit. I come from Bhopal, the city of lakes. I am pursuing B.E. in Electrical and electronics Engg. From UIT Rgpv Bhopal. Both of my parents are teachers at govt. School and I have a sister younger to me.
Sir, I believe that I am a very sociable person. I interact with people very easily and also I am very helpful in nature because of which I make friends easily. Also I believe I have grown patient over the years tutoring my younger siblings as we know How difficult it is to make them do the one thing they hate the most, study.
The greatest achievement in my life I believe has been meeting former president Dr. APJ Abdul Kalam Azad when he visited my school. He is my ideal and has inspired me a lot. On his visit, I recited a poem at his welcome and seeked his blessings. My next big achievement is getting placed in TCS during campus placements.
So by honing the oratory skills and leadership qualities and through the learnings at college during the course of the programme, I wish to pursue my career goal of becoming a successful manager and hold positions of key responsibilities in the organisation I will work and also involve in social welfare activities to make my contributions towards the society.
Thank you.
Hey Aditya
Like everyone else, I believe you have not read my replies to other people..:)
So repeating myself once again: this is your introduction, not one of your family. So cut that part out.
APJ Kalam meeting is not something of your doing; it happened to you and it is not your achievement. Don’t need to mention your greatest achievements as such.
Essentially, I went through this and just found a general lack of connectivity in this. This is like information placed together, trying to follow some pattern or format, without it representing who you actually are.
Shorten this, cut out the extra bits and try to place information in a manner in which it flows and does not seem forced.
Regards
Prashant
Good Morning sir. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to introduce myself. My name is Kriti and i have grown up in the historical city of Aurangabad. I have completed my engineering in Electronics and am Currently working as an Application Analyst at XYZ company. Growing up in a business family i have always admired my father’s knowledge and his leadership skills, which has led me to believe that learning is never limited to the classroom. Thus, along with academics i have been actively involved in extra-curricular activities and sports and am always on a lookout for opportunities to improve myself. In sports, i was a part of my college badminton team and we secured the 2nd position in the inter-collegiate badminton tournament. Handling the responsibilities of the prize Distribution Secretary in the student Council in my college has given me hands on experience of leading and working with a team. Pursuing an MBA would help me to increase my knowledge base and understand the finer aspects of managing a business, thus making me capable to develop and manage an organisation or a new business successfully.
Hey Kriti
This is a fairly good introduction.
Just a few pointers here:
– The start can be crisper, something like: I am Kriti, a graduate engineer in Electronics and currently working….Try to make things as short and simple as possible; this always works.
– You don’t need to mention so many details about your sports related achievment. Just mention your interests and that you have done well. Let them ask you about it. Then talk more about it. This is how you guide the interview.
Just keep these pointers in mind and work on your introduction a little more.
Regards
Prashant
Hi Prashant, please evaluate the below intro.
My name is Raviteja Reddy Sane, I am from Hyderabad and I am a software engineer with 2.5 years of work experience with Infosys Limited. I hold a bachelor’s degree in Electronics and Computers Engineering from SNIST, Hyderabad.
My parents are working in Government sector and my elder brother is an IT professional. Being raised in a family which always believed that Spirituality and Ethics are essential in building one’s character, I have always followed the path which I feel is the right one in terms of morality. Being a Yoga practitioner and a sports enthusiast, my father trained me in yoga and always encouraged me to try out different sports to keep myself active and energetic. This motivation and the eagerness in learning new aspects of life always gave me energy in pursuing my dreams. I enjoy playing badminton, cricket, football and Lawn Tennis and I have represented my school, college and working unit in those sports. I always believe that sports and games help us boost our mental and physical fitness.
My short-term goal, when I joined Infosys, was to gain as much knowledge and expertise as I could get from the organization and to put in practice what I had learnt in my Engineering life. However my long-term goal has always been to acquire managerial, entrepreneurial and leadership skills which helps to improve the quality of my life. Working with Infosys has helped me in gaining hands-on experience to successfully complete the project deliverables on time and has further strengthened my resolve to gain more experience on how an organization functions at grass-root level and what factors contribute to the overall decision making process. I always gave my best to achieve the client’s expectation by efficiently accomplishing the tasks assigned and for my valuable performance, I was awarded the Insta Award- Certificate of Appreciation in 2017.
After making a good start to my professional career, now I feel it is the time to start pursuing my long-term goal with a post-graduate degree in Business Administration. An MBA degree will expose me to the variety of programs in Business Administration which helps me to gain the knowledge and managerial skills required to excel in the corporate world and it also shapes my life personally and professionally.
Hey Raviteja
You have great content but the thing is, this answer of yours actually consists of three answers:
– your introduction
– your short-term goals
– your long-term goals
Also, it talks a lot about your family. As I have said as a response to numerous introductions on this page, this is your introduction and not the introduction of your family. So keep that in mind. Don’t need to give details about your family here. Mention if asked.
Work on shortening this: as a simple rule, reduce it to the five to six points that matter and that connect with each other. Introductions don’t require such detail.
Regards
Prashant
Thanks Prashant, I’ll shorten the intro as suggested.
My name is Sonam Shivani, resident of Pune. I completed my engineering in electronics. My father works is Air force, my mother is a house wife, my elder sister works as a manager with BPCL and younger brother is in 1st year BCS. Having been born and bought up in air force family I had exposure to different kind of environment which made me adaptable to different environments, at the same time it taught me to respect time and adhere to its limit. I worked for Flex in their supply chain sector. My work role included procurement, vendor development, inventory management and accounts payable. My hobbies are writing, reading and designing. I wish to increase my knowledge base in operations. Hence a MBA degree, which will provide me a right path to grow in this field.
Hey Sonam
Went through this and find 1 major issue about this: this introduction talks more about Air force/your family than talking about you. You need to change the focus of this introduction and make sure and bring it on yourself. Air force background needs to be mentioned once and your family details are not required. Remember, this is about your and not your brother/sister.
Regards
Prashant
Hi, my name is Pulkit & I am an engineering graduate with a background in IT industry. I spent the last two years developing my skills as an application development analyst for Infosys specifically under DotNet technology. I won several performance awards for client satisfaction and promoted with highest appraisal. I love managing and working with teams and solving client issues. I strongly believe in maintaining my work ethic and like to make sure I complete my tasks with utmost sincerity.
Hey Pulkit
This is pretty good; crisp and effective. Even though this is pretty impressive, just feel it is on the shorter side and you add probably one more detail to it (something personal or something related to your key learning/mission in life). This will complete this.
Regards
Prashant
Good Morning sir – Hi I am Khushboo Heera Nandani – a B.com graduate from Hyderabad. I have been brought up in a business family, I had an early introduction to the world of business and entrepreneurship. However, it was my course work at college through which I was more fascinated towards the field of Finance and that is the reason why I took up a job with Deloitte, one of the big four companies, as a tax consultant. This kept my interest intact and now I am ready to explore more about the field of finance. When it comes to hobbies I love surfing the internet and experiment with food at times. I am person who believes in being honest and positive, aspects which are helpful for an overall growth of a human being.
Hey Khushboo
This is one of the best introductions posted here on this page. Overall, this is well-structured and presented. I believe you will have the necessary facts to back this up and present in your interview. This needs no tinkering..:)
Great job.
Prashant
Good morning. I’m Reshma Varma, a native of Kerala, working as a Developer Associate at SAP Labs. I help to create a better User Experience for SAP Applications. I did my education in different parts of India which has helped instill versatility and adaptability in me. I’m a Computer Science graduate from Government Engineering College, Thrissur where I held several positions and imbibed people management and organization skills . Art is a hobby I enjoy in my leisure time. I sketch and do various crafts and try to channel my interest so that it is of use to the society. I also like dancing and reading fiction.
Is this good for a 1 minute self introduction?
Good morning. I’m Reshma Varma, a native of Kerala, working as a Developer Associate at SAP Labs. I help to create a better User Experience for SAP Applications. A member of the Cultural Committee at SAPDesign team, I have coordinated various cultural events in the past year. I’m a Computer Science graduate from Government Engineering College, Thrissur where I held several positions of importance like Class Representative for my batch for 4 years, Coordinator for Dyuthi’15- National level tech fest hosted by my college. I did my education in different parts of India which has helped instill versatility and adaptability in me. I also like dancing and reading fiction in my leisure time. Art is also a hobby I follow. I sketch and do various crafts and try to channel my interest so that it is of use to the society.
A small variation to the above one.
Hey Reshma
The second one shows marked improvement in comparison to the first one. But overall, I just feel a distinct lack of coherence in the answer. For example, the information flow is in this pattern:
– Work ex + detail
– College related information
– back to acads and computer science
– back to college details (CR and all)
– Positive skill
– Personal hobbies and interests
Now this can be done a lot better. Club your qualification and work right at the start with 1 quality that defines. Then some details about your college (don’t mention so many details, just quote you were in a leadership position) and then talk about personal qualities and hobbies. The answer will be much more coherent in this case.
Regards
Prashant
Sorry, but isn’t it Work ex -> College + PORs -> Acads -> hobbies ?
Please let me know if you think otherwise.
Thank you in advance.
Hey
I actually had posted what you have written. Sentence by sentence, this is what it breaks down to.
What I was recommending what that keep the information in one flow.
How this could have been presented better:
Good morning. I’m Reshma Varma, a native of Kerala, and a computer science graduate. Currently working as a Developer Associate at SAP Labs, I primarily work on creating better User Experience for SAP Applications. Additionally, as a member of the Cultural Committee at SAPDesign team, I have coordinated various cultural events in the past year. My ability to multitask is actually something I developed during my college days, wherein I held several positions of importance like Class Representative for my batch for 4 years, Coordinator for Dyuthi’15- National level tech fest hosted by my college.
The content is the same but the presentation is much more logical; the connections between your work and personality are made and in general, this sounds more impressive.
Regards
Prashant
Hello,I’m Harsh,an economics graduate from Calcutta University,Kolkata. Having been raised in a business-oriented family,I received early exposure to the world of business,and now am an integral part of my family business for the last 12 months-an experience that has been particularly enriching as it has helped me in developing skills pertaining to my work-rate and decision-making. Apart from this,my hobbies are inclined towards sports-mainly Cricket and Football,something that has supplemented the importance of teamwork and coordination for my day-to-day work as well.
Hey Harsh
Honestly speaking, post this introduction, I see no reason why should go for MBA. This needs to be re-worked a little and you need to show you have the skills as well as the need for an MBA. Think about this. Read this from an external viewpoint and you will see that you are nullifying your need for MBA straight away. So just include that portions to this answer and make it more inclusive in nature.
Regards
Prashant
Sir
can you please upload something on ‘why MBA?’ as well?
Hi Shriya
Will work on something for that answer as well.
Regards
Prashant
Good morning sir, I am nafisa, a final year student in BBA. Being from a business family background I have always been attracted towards the field of business. With my attitude of never giving up and coming with a unique solution to the problem I want to grow up to be a business entrepreneur and also add something to the society
Hey Nafisa
This is not your introduction; this is the introduction of your business family.
What is special about us? What defines you as a person? What is it that you are seeking? What skills you wish to learn? All of this is absent from this introduction. Talk about yourself first.
Regards
Prashant
Good morning sir, I am nafisa, a final year student of BBA. I come from udaipur, the city of lakes. My mother is a housewife and my father is a businessman because of which at an early stage I have been interested in business. I have the curiosity of learning new things and I don’t easily give up rather find some unique solution to the problem. I am good at communicating with people and have a cheerful attitude which helps me in forming peer groups easily. I want to learn hard and soft skills from your institute so as to develop my managerial skills and grow up to be a successful entrepreneur and also add my two cents towards helping the society.
Hey Nafisa
Great job with the edit. Much improved and much more coherent; this perfectly reflects your personality.
Regards
Prashant
Good Morning Sir,
I am Manu Goyal, an IT Graduate from Delhi. I bring along 2.5 years of experience in Accenture in Product Vertical. I had the responsibility of handling key customer-centric issues and business availability roles. The proactive nature of work helps me in exhibiting my leadership skills and appreciated for the commitment I bring to my work. I have a family of 4, with my father, practicing medicine, mother homemaker and sister a Ph.D. Scholar. Being grownup seeing the commitment, sincerity, and ability to handle pressure needed in a medical profession, same is being reflected in my work. Besides, I have been actively involved in sports throughout my life. The recent development being bodybuilding and long distance running. Both the activities taught me about the value of patience and persistence and having a positive impact on my attitude towards my life. Thank you.
Hey Manu
Most of this is good. Just a couple of things:
1. I am Manu Goyal, an IT Graduate from Delhi. I bring along 2.5 years of experience in Accenture in Product Vertical. I had the responsibility of handling key customer-centric issues and business availability roles. The proactive nature of work helps me in exhibiting my leadership skills and appreciated for the commitment I bring to my work.: Too much content. Don’t need these details right at the start.
2. Same thing goes for the concluding part: can be made shorter and crisper.
Overall, awesome content but presentation can be improved even more.
Regards
Prashant
Hi Prashant, Thanks for your valuable feedback. Please find a couple of changes I have incorporated and welcome your suggestions on the same.
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Good Morning, Sir, I am Manu goyal native of the national capital of India, Delhi and have completed my higher secondary from Apeejay School Delhi. I am an IT graduate from IP university and bring along 2.5 years of experience at Accenture in a product vertical.I HAVE a family of 4, with my father, practicing medicine, mother homemaker and sister a Ph.D. Scholar. Being grownup seeing the commitment and sincerity needed in the medical profession, the same has been reflected in my work and appreciated for the same.Besides, I have been actively involved in sports throughout my life. The recent development being bodybuilding and long distance running. WHICH HELPED ME IN BRINGING A POSITIVE CHANGE IN MY ATTITUDE towards life.
Hey Manu
Marked improvement here. Still feel the first couple of lines can be shorter (the person in front of you knows from your resume/work/details that you are Delhi based). More or less, this is sorted.
Regards
Prashant
Good morning. Myself disha,i am an economics graduate. I have been seen as a goal oriented person.The desire to become self dependent has always motivated me. However, challenges ,hard times and criticism drive me to perform with dedication,determination and responsibility.
Graduation in economics provided me with to use analytical tools of economics in problem solving which will give me an edge over business understanding.
Hey Disha
Just the line: I have been seen as a goal oriented person. What does this mean? Are you or are you not? Why use use complex sentences? Why not find something better to define your own self?
Also, too many heavy words in the second sentence. Define yourself better; present a better picture of yourself.
At present, this is a collection of heavy words but not a real peak inside the real person. Your intro should be your reflection.
Regards
Prashant
Thank You for the feedback Sir.But,then how to rephrase it?
Mr. Prashant in need of your valuable feedback.
Nirmal Kumar, An Aerospace Engineer form Amrita School of Engineering which not only imparted the technical knowledge but also sensitivity towards the society and spirituality. Being the only child in a business family gave me the privilege to get acquainted with the nuance of business from an young age. I am known for my versatility this is due to my schooling which was done in 6 different schools where i met people from different walks of life. Talking about my short term goal is to work in a consultancy company which aids me in getting exposure into different fields and companies while gaining immense knowledge and experience to ease myself into the long term goal of starting my own enterprise.
Hey Nirmal
Went through this. Honestly speaking, this seems very disjointed. The information is not well structured and do not get a sense of coherence from this. You need to re-work and present it in much more logical manner.
Try to look at it from one perspective: what is extra or not needed here. This way, you will be able to weed out the extra information.
regards
Prashant
Hello Sir
My name is Kedar Rao. I am from Mumbai. I am a BCOM graduate from Birla college, Kalyan. With my dad working in nestle and my brother working in shogun organics, both of them being production companies, I have an inclination towards pursuing my MBA in Operation Management. My short term goals include getting all acquainted with professionalism, work ethics,honing my required skills and gaining a knowledge of the industry in which I wish to advance my career. In the long term, I wish to set up my own business after gaining immense experience of the industry and the processes. My hobbies include watching and playing cricket which has made me patient and has helped in developing my ability to face failures. I also enjoy reading comics and mangas as well as autobiographies in my past time. I am keen in exploring areas which I enjoy and which are out of my field as to diversify my knowledge. Being an extrovert, I enjoy working in groups which helps in carrying out decisions smoothly. Thank you.
Hey Kedar
Amazing content in the introduction. Overall, pretty good but a few concerns:
– it is a little too verbose
– can be made crisper and more relevant
That is all you need to do.
Regards
Prashant
Good Morning
My name is Abhinandini Das . I am a B.tech graduate in Environmental Engineering . My father is a bank manager and my mother is a homemaker so I believe i have the managerial skills deep rooted inside me that’s why i want to pursue mba . it will also help me to enhance my skills . i also firmly believe that my b.tech knowledge and doing mba in finance will definitely help me to achieve my goals. my short term goal is to have a strong base of knowledge and my long term goal is to use my knowledge in managing the economy and environment together . since i am an environment engineer i really understand the value of natural resources and it’s contribution towards a country’s economy.
Hey Abhinandini
Honestly speaking, this introduction really does not cut it.
The first two lines are confused and are essentially talking about your parents, not you.
Then you have used generalisations about your goals/what you want but really provide no evidence that you have the skills for the same. These are just aspirations and do not find reflection in what you have done.
Look within and see what facts you can add to this. List down all your strengths, hobbies and activities and from these, take out some facts to share here.
Regards
Prashant
Good Morning Sir,I am Neha Noren Parshad.I am an Electrical Engineer from Northern India Engineering College,Delhi.Both of my parents work in Govt. sector.Five years from now,I see myself working in a reputated organization and to provide them my versatility and enthusiasm.I have a keen interest in hardware projects and I wish to produce something that may change the lives of others.I am an optimistic person but my diligence defines me the best.I run the website http://www.know8.in.I am a god fearing person and i also give sermons on sundays as well.
Hi Neha
The content in your intro is good, which is a good thing. But overall, better structuring is required. The information does not flow in a seamless manner. You can make things crisper and shorter here. For example, the last sentence can be put across better: I like to constructively use my Sundays and give sermons at the local church (something like this, hope you get the drift).
Regards
Prashant
Good morning sir,
I am Shakti Chitnis, currently in last year of engineering.I was introduced to the corporate world early in life because my father has been working for JK Lakshmi Cement for almost 27 years.
I am an innovative person eho believes in finding alternative solutions to problems. I’ve always believed in being pragmatic in my decisions.
I have a diploma in Tabla Vadan & love playing football.
Thank You
Hey Shakti
You have some strong positives:
– You have great content to share
– You have unique interests
Presentation is the key. You can come out a lot stronger in your portrayal and present this same a lot better.
So work on it and try to present the same information in a better way. Search for some better words to describe yourself and add what is it that drives you.
Regards
Prashant
Hi, I’m Arya from Chennai. I’m currently doing my final year of business administration in SIC.My father is an contractor and my mom is an home maker and I have an elder brother, he is working in a IT firm.My short term goal is to work in a reputed organization and my long term goal is to become an entrepreneur.My strength is team work and honesty. Thank you.
I’ve an doubt…when we says that I’m from xxx city.. Is that city is where we did our studies or our native place.
Hey Arya
Couple of things:
– This is your intro; not your families. I have mentioned the same in the article. Your introduction talks about your family instead of you.
– You generally refer to your native place. Add this if this ads something substantial to your profile.
Regards
Prashant
Is it necessary that the startup we mention should be famous and well established??
Hey Ayushi
As long as the start-up is genuine and the work done is genuine, you can mention any name. Just need facts to back up whatever you say.
Regards
Prashant
hello sir,i am manish bansal a mining engineering graduate working in lime stone mines owned by wcl.
having been born and brought up in a financially struggling joint business family in jaipur i had an early exposure to trade,business and chaos of resource scarcity.and that made me adjustable to meager situations.
as a person i think of myself as someone driven by values,ambition,and resilience.my hobbies are reading,playing chess and teaching.an urge to not to settle to early,explore more of myself and acquire some managerial skills is the reason i want to pursue mba.
Hey Manish
Couple of quick points:
– The first half is frankly too negative. don’t paint such a negative picture. showcase the same in a better manner. just focus on the challenges and what you learn.
– Another issue is that in the second, the information seems a little disjointed. Just connect your interests and your skills in a better way.
I believe you have the necessary content; the presentation needs to improve big time.
regards
Prashant
Hello Sir,
I am Simran Kaur and i hail from Chandigarh.I have done my Chemical engineering from Punjab University and am currently working in R&D Ongc.I wish to grow in this field and thus i want to pursue an MBA in operations so acquire the correct skills to nurture myself. My short term goal is to get into a prestigious institute to initiate my dream into reality. My long term goal is to grow and learn and make a difference and i am sure with the skills of perseverance and hard working attitude i have i can work upon myself.As a hobby i like writing and singing.
Thats all my my side. Thank you
Hey Simran
The introduction is well-framed.
Just a few quick pointers:
– Add a positive quality to define yourself at the start
– Improve the language and make it crisper. Feel a little bit of rambling here.
– Can you add something more substantive with respect to what you wish to achieve or learn?
Just some pointers for you to mull over.
Regards
Prashant
Hi
i am vinay baunthiyal.
iam persuing bsc(it) from graphic era hill university dehradun.as my roots are from kotdwar i have done my schooling from dav public school kotdwar.
i am adaptive to any situation and a good team player.because of my interpersonal and leadership skills i was the caption of bsc(it) football and vollyball team.
so far my family background is concerned if i talk about my family,my family has 3 members.my father is an army personal due to which i have a sense of integrity and dedication towards my work.
i have couple of hobbies like playing football and watching tv series.
my weaknesses is am am egoistic person due to which i lag behind somtimes.but now i am working on it coping up from this weakness.
thankyou.
Hey Vinay
A few quick pointers:
– this can be made shorter/crisper. too much rambling here.
– your introduction so focus on yourself. mention about family if asked.
– cut the negatives. not needed.
– you have sufficient information here. frame it better.
Regards
Prashant
hello sir
I am Prachi Toshniwal and I am from Mumbai.I have completed my graduation in electronics and telecommunication engineering.I come from a joint family and thus have adjusting nature .My father is a businessman and my mom is a teacher.My hobbies are teaching,dancing,reading books and making greeting cards.i was thought to be of non creative type and when I made my first greeting card,even I was happy of doing something new.My strengths are punctuality, learning new things and being optimist.My weakness is I am sensitive. My short goal is to be a MBA from your esteemed institute and to join reputed company for account manager and my long term goal is to grow and contribute in the future growth of company
Hey Prachi
Went through this. This is kind of verbose and can be made crisper. Focus on providing key details about yourself. Something like:
Hi, I am Prachi, an electronics and telecommunication engineer with a diverse set of interests and penchant for learning new things. Grounded in values because of my upbrining in a joint family, I believe in…
This is how you can better structure it.
Regards
Prashant
Hi Prashant,
Please evaluate below introduction-
Good morning Sir,I’am Rohit , a graduate engineer and currently working as a senior s/w engineer.My father is working as Joint director in state government.I have a keen interest in technology and financial side of business.I have been intrigued by the working of the financial sector.
My short term goal is to acquire the skills necessary for working in management & contributing to the growth of the organization.
Over the long term, i see myself as a successful manager working with a higher role as well as responsibilities.
Thank you.
-Thank you Prashant
Hey Rohit
Couple of things here:
– is the line about your father needed? How does it contribute to your introduction? Remember, this is about you and not him.
– Now you have talked about the financial sector. Do you have anything to back it up? How can you better represent? Probably, just add a small line about the kind of work or research you have taken up in this field.
– As far as your career goals go, these are generic lines that everyone is going to say. Any better way to craft this? Or anything more specific that you have in mind?
– The sentences are written well but this is cliched; every second student can be expected to say the same. What makes you stand out? What is your shining quality that comes out in this?
Just a few things to ponder over here.
Regards
Prashant
Good Morning, I am Shubham Shah, a studemt of Chemical Engineering from Kolhapur.
Having a business background , I would like to use my technical knowledge and the business practices that I will learn, to develope a business.
I am quiet sincere in my work.I always try to complete the tasks with full efficiency and within deadlines.
I play guitar and keyboard as a hobby.I have interest in reading books, especially mystery and thriller ones.
Thank You!
Hey Shubham
Went through this.
The positive is that you have content to share in your introduction.
The negative is that this is conventional and bland presentation. Can you make it crisper and more precise. Ask yourself a simple question: does this leave a positive impression? does this make you stand out? Currently, it does not.
Regards
Prashant
Hi,
Should I be discreet about my category or I can freely talk about it in my introduction? Because there’s a bit of history to my caste which can be asked in the interview.
Also, what specifics should I mention in my family background? Do I have to mention everything about my village, or just about my parents/siblings?
Hey
You can talk about your category if asked. There is nothing to hide about it in fact. If your caste is relevant to your present identity or events of the past have shaped you in some way, then use it constructively. Else leave it to the interviewers to bring it up.
Family background: convey minimal information; anything which has significantly contributed to your personality. Leave it to the interviewer and let him ask these details. Your introduction; not your families or village’s introduction.
Regards
Prashant
I loved your introduction 2.
I was also bored of family and hobbies part thanks for remodeling the introduction in a technical one.
Thanks Supriya
Wordpandit
First of all, I would like to thank you sir for giving me a chance to presenting myself.
I am riya raj patil, a resident of Maharashtra
I’m pursuing my b.pharmacy from govt college of Pharmacy,nashik
As far concern to family we are five members including me.my father is working in Mahindra and Mahindra.my mother is homemaker.i have one sister and brother both are completing their education.
Coming to my hobbies playing badminton and yoga,watching cricket,to write diary.
Coming to what I had achieved in my life, well I had a long list of achievements from which I will mention few.
I had got many appreciations in Yoga and archery & got selected for many regional and state level competition .etc
Also I had got bronze medal in state level yoga competitions.
I’m nss and rotract member
My strengths are I am punctual,honest and positive attitude. I’m friendly and helpful in nature. I like to share my ideas, Every time I am excited to know the new things, I really like to maintain every relationship to growing myself.
Sometime my strength is My weakness. I can’t say no when someone ask for help
My short term goal is to breaking up this interview and join company as soon as possible where I can enhance my skills and knowledge.
My long term goal is to join reputed company like yours and be a responsible employee and in future get higher position in company
That’s all from my side and Thankyou for giving me so much of time for Introducing myself.
Hi Riya
Thanks for sharing this.
Just a few quick observations:
1. Your introduction has a factual tone to it; it does not talk about your personality.
Frame it to reflect the kind of person you are and you need to talk about your qualities.
2. Your introduction should focus on you and not necessarily your family.
One line about the family is more than enough. You can say something like: My father works in a leading manufacturing company in India and this has given me exposure to the kind of qualities and performance levels demanded by leading companies.
Overall, you should shorten your introduction and make it more appealing. Currently, it is too factual in nature.